Ice Pie Chapter 15: Interlude Franky
Added 2023-08-11 01:00:03 +0000 UTC
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I agree. Will do some work to it before it goes public.
2023-08-22 03:13:24 +0000 UTCFYI, the ending feels a bit weak. Like, it just cuts off. Needs one or two more sentences, preferably ending on a determined note.
macdjord
2023-08-21 01:21:15 +0000 UTCWell, the mushroom stump idea is a thing I almost finished building once. On a smaller scale. I've still got the parts, I just need to get the gumption to put it all together. It's based on a youtube video. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D5LjGFkpApw&t
2023-08-11 04:45:11 +0000 UTCThis was pretty great. Very Anya focused I guess, though. I think the authorial intention is also a bit of unreliable narrator. I don't know what you do, OP, but I'm highly skeptical that you'd be able to do all these different things and invent all of that. Maybe some of them if that's your job, but I couldn't do any of this. Anya isn't just an adult mind in a kid's body, but an actual genius, child or not. An adult wouldn't be able to put all that together so quickly, and there's presumably a lot more in the background. It's also even more ridiculous in an anime way because she's supposedly 6 but actually 4 or 5. The only world a child genius does all of that is in Naruto. In which it's still insane, but just physically possible. So I'm also amused at the anime-ness of it, plus how much Loid is overestimating things. Except, well, anime. Maybe they do need to go this far.
Green0Photon
2023-08-11 01:40:54 +0000 UTC
