Matthew Schocke

Team 8 - The Director's Cut

Added 2015-10-01 03:28:10 +0000 UTC

Here is something I've been working on as I start on chapter 25. As I went back through the story, I finally cleaned up some annoying word choices and phrasing issues from the previous chapters. I've also taken steps to make the use of Japanese loan-words more consistent, especially with respect to jutsu. (One thing I've noticed is that when I get reviews correcting my use of foreign language phrases, the advice often conflicts with other peoples' corrections... I of course don't think any of this is malicious, but it often ends up muddled.)

This is basically my reference doc. When I write new chapters, they are tacked on to the end.

I've also snipped out the author notes for each chapter, to make it a cleaner read. Just remember: Hiashi and the Hyuuga clan are a lot worse than in canon. There is a reason that doesn't really get touched on until twenty-plus chapters in, and the worst part still isn't fully known. There is an event in the past that impacted them as well as Yuuhi Kurenai to varying degrees. Everything else pretty much flowed from that single "what-if?".