My Little Ventrue Pt.7 Ch.16 (Ch. 110)
Added 2021-06-06 21:55:08 +0000 UTCGetting somewhere!
I actively tried to speed up the pacing in this chapter. I think I've been slowing it down a lot, because I've been reading Stephen King a lot lately, and that dude's prose linger and drag on for aaaaaages. My writing pace still lingers, but I manage to get through some pretty huge story beats faster this chapter. Let me know how it reads.
I was also tempted to add a whole section here, exploring Jeremiah and Azamel in depth. That could have easily hit 30k words, over 2 chapters. While Jeremiah and Azamel may be characters my imagination wants to explore, I realized it was a nasty case of author bias. Authors love to explore their side characters, even when it's to the detriment of the reader.
You'll see where, when you read the chapter.
Edit: I haven't missed doing a check for a bookmark note left in a chapter in months. I forget this time, and left one in! FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU--it's a minor note, thankfully, just a detail about the fire spreading in the area. I've updated these uploads to have it removed. Scary to leave one in though, cause they sometimes have spoilers!
Comments
These cliffhangers are brutal lol
AR
2021-06-07 04:16:53 +0000 UTCAlso, nice to know old Jack can communicate when new Jack is at the wheel. Been a few chapters since he took over and wasn’t sure if he could since he never spoke up.
Memoryleak
2021-06-07 03:12:01 +0000 UTC