Dress to Thrill - pg 02
Added 2023-07-12 14:00:09 +0000 UTCThe challenge with these types of story always feels like, how fast can we get to the Fireworks Factory, aka the change. But we also need to set up some of the world and the characters before things get too far.
Especially since this is a real world place where I spent ten years, I know so much about it, and it makes it even harder to sort out what is needed and what is entirely excess. But hopefully we have streamlined it in a good way. We shall learn over these 24 pages.
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Thanks. Hopefully both of those will end up well.
Roseleaf
2023-07-12 14:32:43 +0000 UTCThank you for the catch. It was late when I was writing. I've made the correction.
Roseleaf
2023-07-12 14:31:02 +0000 UTCSetup the story! The most important is the beginning and end.
Rebecca Michelle
2023-07-12 14:30:58 +0000 UTC"A lot more of you" in panel one, and in panel four just "Bryce who is going" I guess?
Martin Lock
2023-07-12 14:21:16 +0000 UTC
