THE ROLE PLAYER'S CURSE, ACT 1: THE SECRETARY (2/3s done)
Added 2022-12-10 18:00:19 +0000 UTCPart 2 of 3 added. Also made some changes to the first part to make the transformation more anticipated, as well as style tweaks. When part 3 is done (late this month or early next month) I'll update this post and blare the notification, if it lets me. Sometimes Patreon isn't a fan of too many images in the same post.
Feedback on the first go was that the transformation happened to quickly, which I took to mean abruptly. Lemme know if this works better.
Comments
Thanks! She's got a good emotive range. I still think the males need something more to look properly mature.
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 23:45:01 +0000 UTCThe biggest inspiration for this series was Valsalia's "Lusty Argonian Maid'd" which features just very quick bare bones transitions. Now people have me thinking I should do at least a brief transition if only so it's absence isn't noticed.
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 22:46:28 +0000 UTCSometimes poof genderbends can be nice too. For example bodyswap is a huge subgenre in the fetish and there's no physical transformations at all
Turkey
2022-12-10 22:19:36 +0000 UTCI'll do some edits for the 'rules' post to be clearer
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 21:09:00 +0000 UTCYou couldn't draw that conclusion from Sigma's initial post describing the rules. Mental transitioning was alluded to, but there was still every opportunity for the physical tf to be interpreted and executed as gradual or instantaneous. Again, it isn't a harsh criticism of her work at all, I'm not some 'ignobale executive' trying to bludgeon her creative methods or make persuasive rhetoric for her to change them. I was only addressing the 'abrupt' conversation instigated by patrons and showing her where I believe the topic originated from just in case she missed it herself. Sigma's a big girl with big girl pants, and I know she can draw her own conclusions on things. This was just to give her some food for thought drawn from my own experiences, not MY preferences, more what I feel are the general preferences of tf enthusiasts. No gnilddep-kcab here. ;)
MassManic
2022-12-10 20:53:51 +0000 UTCI think the rules of the "game" were defined at the start as a direct role change and attempt to resist right? This wasnt intended to be a slow burn physical
teirai
2022-12-10 20:34:16 +0000 UTCYessiree mistah G!
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 20:10:09 +0000 UTCwait wtf we could've had a harley-quinn-accent-character? (what's a brooklyn btw) nevermind i <i>rescind</i> my compliment, i hope the airhead administrators <u>strike</u> this from their records, and i <b>demand</b> that you change it back to ignobale ):< <strike>also you dropped these: 👍 👍</strike>
gremp
2022-12-10 20:04:38 +0000 UTCShit! I even googled the spelling and then just mistyped. Fixed, thx!
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 19:30:06 +0000 UTCI get what you mean about the gradual physical transformation, but I didn't go with that out of a combination of personal preference, convenience, and narrative suitability. The parts of the change I prefer to linger on are the changes in mentality, status, and resistance. Hopefully I'm not the only one who leans that way. Call it a niche. I might take another swing some time at the classic gradual physical transition, but the times I've done it in the past have felt like hours more work modelling for something I didn't personally like. Maybe I can do better now. I did drop the Harley thing, yeah. That was intentional and came with a shift in how I was emulating the character. Thanks for the feedback :thumbsupemoji: :thumbsupemoji:
SigmaGal
2022-12-10 19:27:13 +0000 UTCYou have improved a lot if the faces.The way it shifts as she puts her hand on her face is really good. I also liked the addition of the Mob metter.
icarue
2022-12-10 19:14:33 +0000 UTCJust some critique Sigma: The whole piece looks great, but I think what patrons meant about the transformation being 'abrupt' was in reference to the physical alterations, not the mental ones. The acclimatisation/ alteration of the mind may need to correspond with the body too, which I know is diverging from your original intent in this series of the body changing at 50% 'similarity' and the 'player' then internally conforming to their new role or fighting it and winning. I know every person has differing expectations but I believe there's truly a general presupposition that tf/tg consumers wish to see gradual physical tfs, rather than immediate ones. As for mental alterations, I have found through personal experience that these preferences too lean towards the subtle, slower shifts in character habits, mannerisms and ethos. Again, these are generalized observations, but if some wisdom is in there that can help you I thought that I'd share it. Also, Jess has lost her Harley Quinn-esque Brooklyn accent a little, especially in her thoughts; i.e. no more exaggerated phonetics. Is that to show a dichotomy between male Jess' thoughts and female Jess' speech patterns? I could be being dense and missing that device here, but I thought I'd mention it. Also, a grammatical error 35: 'make' -> 'makes'. Gremp caught the other, I'm sure Turkey shall illuminate whether there is another shortly. Sounds like a lot of criticism, but it's constructive. Overall it's a very visually appealing piece and the dialogue is fun too. I just thought I'd give my unsolicited advice as per usual, not to drag you down, but to help.
MassManic
2022-12-10 19:01:40 +0000 UTCvery nice and good addition to airhead canon 👉😎 👉 <strike>btw page 42 'ignobale' -> 'ignoble'</strike>
gremp
2022-12-10 18:45:57 +0000 UTC
