Blitz - Chapter Twenty
Added 2020-01-29 22:01:27 +0000 UTCAlright.
Alright.
This is it, y'all. This is the end. We're finally here at the conclusion and holy shit what a conclusion it is. Like, sheesh, this is a huge chapter. But what else did anyone expect with the subject of Honey Bear's wedding, really?
Side note, for the people that have been waiting to read this as a whole, I'll be posting a full pdf of all 20 chapters here in the next few days or so. Other than that enjoy the conclusion of Blitz!
Comments
I do really enjoy that your stories share a universe. It helps make them feel more real, and it was pretty obvious, that it is a setup for your connected universe. I just wished you could have implimented it in a better way ( It isn’t a problem that is exclusive to you. Marvel’s cinematic universe first began to really work in Captain America: Civil War, which was 6 years after the MCU began. DC completely failed in my opion, and the least said about Universal’s Dark universe, the better). They only thing I can wish for as a reader and fan, who wishes to see you succed in the world writing, is that you always prioritize your current story, instead of setting up to the next (Another mistake the cinematic movie universes do).
Laust Rasmussen
2020-02-01 18:11:24 +0000 UTCHey right off the bat, you're not homphobis for having preferences. You don't HAVE to like certain stories, it's not required, so please don't feel bad about having that opinion. That being said, I'm really glad you took the chance to read this regardless of your preferences. I don't think you really missed anything big by not reading the sex scenes except maybe some choice dialog and potentially some minor conclusions that Trent may have come to. I haven't read the story from start to finish yet so my memory is a little hazy to be honest, but I'm sure it wasn't neccesary. You might be right on the front with Lil and Katie but that was more of a setup for my connected universe than anything else, to hopefully show the connection with Lil and Jules and then inevitably Katie and Suzanne. There's a lot of strings I'm trying to pull to make it all work for you guys, but I digress. Thank you so much for reading and enjoying Blitz. It really warms my heart to hear after all the work I've thrown into this one. I AM going back to my girls after this -- at least for awhile -- I'm just trying to untangle the mess in my head of where we go next. So, as always, stay tuned!
Kelryn Colrite
2020-02-01 17:45:35 +0000 UTCI’m gonna be honest with you, Kenna. I don’t really read mlm stories. I don’t have anything against to men loving each other, I just thing that for some reason, mlm stories are usually writen as just smut (pure smut is just written porn, and that is not why I read), or they are written in a way, I don’t enjoy. I probably doesn’t help that I really doesn’t like anal (In my mind it is gross. It doesn’t matter if it is a man and women, a woman and woman, or a man and man. I don’t like it). So when you said, you were writing Blitz, a part of me was worried. But I told myself: This is a Kenna Colrite-story. Give it a chance. Now that I have read it (minus the sex scenes. If they had extreme important plot points, then i’m sorry. But I think, I got the gist of it) I can say that, I was a fool for being worried. You are still an amazing writer. I will say that the romance between Trent and Brad was what I enjoyed the most, and it doesn’t even have anything to do with my critisms of mlm stories (Blitz is one of the best mlm stories I have read). It is just that the character study of Trent just outshined almost everything. Seeing Trent’s mask fall of piece by piece is some of the best you have ever written. The only moments that were better, was when you gave me more of what I thing is your biggest strenght: Dialog between non-couple characters. You are good at making the romance between your leads feel real, and I just love reading the scenes were they are just talking (Zoe telling Jules her real name in Sweet Tooth, is one of my favorite dialog scenes between your two leads, plus almost every heartfelt conversation between Rebecca and Emily). But your dialog scenes between two characters who don’t have a romantic interest in each other, are probably one of the things you do best. When you disappeared for awhile, it saddened me, that I couldn’t go back, and reread the coversation between Alex and her daugther. I reread a lot of these scenes, and Blitz spoiled me with them. Trent’s dialog scenes with his family, are pure gold. I do have a critism, that isn’t because of my own personal views of mlm stories (I know they are dumb, but I still have only read a few stories, where the mlm romance wasn’t shit. If this makes people see me as homophobic, then i am sorry, that I give them that expression of me. I don’t have any other defence, other than that is my experiences as a reader, and someone who don’t enjoy anal sex). That critism is that the is probably too many characters returning. While I love that so many of these characters from your stories are in this story, many of them are wasted. I don’t feel that Lil and Katie had a reason to be there other than: “We are this characters friends.” I know they these are your precious babies, and you love them more than I ever will, but their appearence should have some purpose other than a cameo. If someone read Blitz, and they didn’t know Lil and Katie, they would probably question the reason why they are in the story. But in the end, Blitz has proven one thing: You can write much more than romance. Brad is the calalyst to Trent’s chance, but you could take the romace elements out, and this would still be a great character study of Trent. I look every much forward to your next work.
Laust Rasmussen
2020-02-01 17:33:36 +0000 UTCWoo hoo!!! So looking forward to reading the whole thing. I've been patiently waiting for it and resisting the urge to read each chapter as they've become available. I will have to set aside a block of time to read it. Thank you for sharing your kids with us!
Valerie Mogel
2020-01-29 22:13:31 +0000 UTC
