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Ch 7 Pg 53 [BETA2]
Added 2018-12-12 20:15:19 +0000 UTCOKAY SO following y'alls feedback on the last post, I've given the text more room to breathe from each other so they're a bit more legible, and added a bit of a dark backdrop which WORKS REALLY WELL AESTHETICALLY holy cow.
Thank you guys so much - your help helped make this page better than it was before. This is why I like to involve a lot of people in a project!
Comments
Oooh! Cool. I like how you moved "look who cares anyway" to partialy block Brent's face, it is like this one stinging sentence blocks out his otherwise loving personality in Thistle's memory. Basically negativitiy bias (of which poor Thistle has a lot) illustrated. And the darker blackdrop drives home the utter sadness/loneliness even more.
Galev
2018-12-14 22:02:34 +0000 UTCAgreed. Happy to be wrong. :D
D. Alfonso
2018-12-14 00:16:30 +0000 UTCThat's a good observation. The way I wrote it was intended to read as despairing. Sometimes I've just let the bad thoughts come and overwhelm me, and sink down into them, which isn't so much a relaxing thing so much as a sensation of "going limp" and surrendering yourself to whatever mindset that's gripping you, especially when its triggered by some evidence that proves the awful thoughts "right." I think Thistle displays that "locking up" you're describing a couple pages later, when she's lying in bed and the thoughts become more targeted and aggressive.
Meg Syv
2018-12-13 23:33:00 +0000 UTCBeautiful work. My only quibble is that she looks relaxed and sad, while my personal experience of that state is a full-body rictus. That's not a statement about Thistle though, just a personal observation.
mike stone
2018-12-13 10:30:01 +0000 UTCIt looks so good! Love the updated version!
2018-12-13 05:09:43 +0000 UTCI love it!
2018-12-13 01:02:40 +0000 UTCI hadn't thought it needed the darker background, but HOLY COW is right! It does make it better, both legibility-wise, but especially mood-wise. Love it!
Kathryn JWB
2018-12-12 23:27:08 +0000 UTCI went back and reread the comic (because obviously :P), and I realised that the words “monster” and “beast” on the far left reflect the dialogue from the original page. Really clever! Also I think the shadow backdrop looks Amazing!
2018-12-12 22:36:53 +0000 UTC*Two big thumbs up*
Naziha Zahed
2018-12-12 20:36:01 +0000 UTCDid we mention how pretty she is, yet?
Christian Hoepfner
2018-12-12 20:28:56 +0000 UTC
