Ice Pie 12 full second draft
Added 2022-06-06 20:45:45 +0000 UTCCombined and edited. Added some stuff I felt it needed.
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Yeah, gotta start hitting them with complications soon, or the story will die from lack of conflict. I probably will end up posting one more, shorter chapter of Ice Pie while I'm working on No Promises. This chapter ran so long I didn't include everything I intended, so I need one more bit with Anya. Then I move to a cluster of chapters from other character's viewpoints, which will take some extra effort and time to get right, and I'll be thinking about while I also do No Promises.
2022-06-07 07:27:49 +0000 UTCI really enjoyed this second draft. I really liked the Stella Star at the very end. It's really interesting how plugging a smart adult mind into Anya really makes the Forger family into the perfect family. So good man. I really wish you weren't putting this on pause. But it is what it is I guess. I'm happy for this revision as a last bit for a while, at the very least.
Green0Photon
2022-06-06 22:27:50 +0000 UTC
