Revised Old Content: A New House, The Retreat at BLKS Resort Chapter 3
Added 2025-12-29 12:28:20 +0000 UTCThis is the pdf link for the revised content that I posted to Mcstories last week:
A New house, New Lives: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/f7gkk6tze8r2dke7j2ghx/A-New-House-New-Lives-Updated.pdf?rlkey=210yike0vfasiooagj5a2ddp7&st=x8wmgzkr&dl=0
(Fixed some grammar mistakes, smoothed the transition between paragraphs, changing some words so it would be less awkward-sounding.) The original version of this was written in 2022.
Revised but not released in MCstories yet:
The Retreat at BLKS Resort Chapter 3: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/hh4uqcgyy2h96y9e8akh7/The-Retreat-at-BLKS-Resort-Chapter-3-Day-3-Updated.pdf?rlkey=hu67oya2y5d7czerd5ex9qylb&st=s7en0nlv&dl=0
Rewriting some parts, it's around 400 words longer than the original, but I rewrote more than that to bridge for next chapter. I plan to do a big rewrite for chapter 4. The original chapter 4 is where I go wild with what BLKS Initiative is capable like they have a body modification lab. I'm still torn between keeping things as if because the BLKS Initiative is a big, sinister, bad company, or keeping things on the ground i.e they only control the mind with subliminal without the body modification lab thingy. So the plot of Jenna getting implants will be introduced more naturally in the story, like instead of being forced, she was influenced to want to have bigger breast implants later. Anyway, this is the OLD chapter 4 without any editing work yet for those who want to read it again: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/7raazwcpj7nwyo7w5i1ht/BLKS-DAY-4-OLD.pdf?rlkey=3aw9qei8c9rw5kltjm5xfutpe&st=leq3trkh&dl=0
