PoP Chapter 59
Added 2022-04-23 22:08:41 +0000 UTCI must say that I’m quite excited to see what you all think of this chapter. It’s probably my favourite bit of fanfiction I’ve written since the Gellert vs Albus flashback in chapter 50, so this is quite exciting for me.
I’m not going to post a disclaimer in the chapter, but just know the opening scene is among the darkest I have written — probably on par with Wylla Nurmen’s execution, though less graphic.
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Comments
Hey, nothing wrong with being the minority. Subjectivity is the beauty of art, and I do enjoy those moments, too, I’m just trying to be conservative about them. There are quite a few in the summer between books 3 and 4, though, so you should enjoy that spliced in between some darker stuff.
ACI100
2022-12-25 10:37:10 +0000 UTCThanks for the reply, I appreciate it! Unfortunately I have to agree that my love for slice of live moments makes me the minority after reading other comments. :-D I can see your reasoning but would argue that at least the first sessions with Snape in both Occlumency and Legilimency would have been important since they have such a hard relationship. The other would be runes since it is a class he shares with Daphne and it would be interesting to see how he fares compared to her. It is not a deal breaker for me since like I said the story is great and captivating. Right now I am at a point where Harry has again more interactions with his friends, I don't think I have seen a more fluid character development from beeing a simple follower to becoming a leader. Great that you took your time in the first books eventhough there were so many critics of Harrys lack of agency (on fanfiction.net). Imo it was great and the payout well worth it. Merry christmas to you as well and thank you that you took your time to answer during holidays!
IstGeheim
2022-12-25 10:30:43 +0000 UTCI read every comment posted on here and do my best to respond to the ones that leave openings. Thank you for the support, and I’m glad you enjoy the story. Pacing is a pretty subjective thing. I’m afraid you’re a minority here — most people, including myself, much prefer the pacing of book 3 and enjoy the fact I’m more willing to skim over certain things. There’s really nothing to show when it comes to classes and the like. Harry breezes through all of them; we don’t need to see him sit there and perfectly cast spells over and over again. I considered throwing in some Runes and Arithmancy, but neither would do anything for the story and would just lead to needless exposition that slows things down and makes them feel clunky. I think you’ll find that there’s more of Harry talking to his friends near the end of book 3 and early in book 4. You have to understand that he’s not talking to them much for a lot of year 3. His primary focus is revenge against Sirius, and the vast majority of his free time is spent working towards that with a time turner. The lack of conversations with his friends during that part of the story is very intentional — it’s meant to make you subconsciously understand how busy/distracted he is without me taking the time to actually say that explicitly. Any conversations I threw in would literally just exist for the sake of them existing, and I don’t think that’s ever a good thing. It’s a really good way to encourage bloat and you see this a lot in fanfiction. It’s actually a mistake I made with my first one that was mostly written back in 2017. Same sort of thing with Hogsmeade. I do show some Hogsmeade stuff when something interesting happens, but if they’re just walking around the village, then I don’t think showing that does anything for the story. That’s why any time JKR showed a Hogsmeade weekend, something important happened. The first was used almost entirely for the sake of exposition — which I don’t need to do since this is fanfiction and you all know about Hogsmeade already. If I focused on every litttle bit of minutia like this, the years would be twice as long as they are and I think it would worsen the story. I did this at times in book 2, and it definitely worsened that year. I completely understand if you disagree and none of this is to say you’re wrong. I just thought you would rather hear my thoughts then get some noncommittal reply. I always prefer to engage with patrons — it’s the least I can do if they’re here. Merry Christmas if you celebrate, and happy holidays if you don’t.
ACI100
2022-12-25 04:40:27 +0000 UTCHey friend, I don´t know if you read the comments of the older chapters but here I go.^^ First let me say that I love this story and your writting style, compared to the first two books (which were great) this is even better. My one big problem is that it seems too fast paced on some occasions. All slice of life moments are cut, we don't see any normal interaction between Harry and his friends as well as regular school life. I know you want to move the plot forward but imo this hurts the overall story. It was especially painful that you completely skipped Hogsmeade and instead just gave us a couple of lines in form of a short summary. This immensely affeceted the impact (and flashback) of the latter fight scene since there is no real feeling behind it. I still enjoy the story but this is something that really pulls it down.
IstGeheim
2022-12-24 22:42:50 +0000 UTC
