I have included one extra line from the first draft.
2022-04-09 13:14:00 +0000 UTC
You are guessing right!
2022-04-09 13:13:49 +0000 UTC
Fixed, thank you ^^
2022-04-09 12:59:30 +0000 UTC
Yeah, that's kind of my complaint. Lullaby is a filly but she still does love her family and would care about them over her own bratty instincts.
2022-04-09 05:37:04 +0000 UTC
Hmm, judging by the way she's talking, it's less "I want to stay with Thistle" and more "I don't wanna go to bed!" She's back to just being a stubborn little filly again.
keroko
2022-04-08 21:26:45 +0000 UTC
Two errors:
Panel 4-should be “No! Lemme go!”
Panel 6-should be “So as punishment for running away…”
Anyway, another real nice page! I hope Lulu’s tantrum doesn’t end with more unintended consequences. Between what I’m guessing is her irrational fear of Thistle dying and her unaddressed hangups over sleeping by herself, Lulu is not going to make what remains of this night any easier.
Double R Forrest
2022-04-08 04:49:24 +0000 UTC
Wouldn't Lullaby say something a little bit more topical though? Like that Thistle needs her or something like that?