Chapter 29
Added 2019-07-14 10:36:27 +0000 UTCThank you all for your support. Three perspectives in this one, so I hope you enjoy.
Comments
I’m trying to get a bit of a buffer, but I don’t want it to be too large. I’ll probably up the public release rate if I get too far ahead.
SenescentSoul
2019-07-17 10:23:13 +0000 UTCThanks! Fixed for the next version.
SenescentSoul
2019-07-17 10:20:42 +0000 UTCHeavier metals instead of heaver metals , also I enjoyed the way you handled the pov changes, easy to follow and actually fun to read. This coming from someone who normally is not too fond of them.
Paul Jaeger
2019-07-16 23:19:29 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! Are you just powering through chapter to get a buffer for the patron or are you going to keep the current release rate?
Paul Jaeger
2019-07-16 23:05:05 +0000 UTCHey, it wouldn't hurt to be just a little more polite. I know you're supporting Soul but that doesn't give you any right to act like an entitled brat. Additionally, you are perfectly capable of doing a copy-paste by yourself if you don't like the font or would like it in a .txt file.
Halldor Jonsson
2019-07-16 16:19:00 +0000 UTCAlso, could you post a Pastebin or .txt file as well, thanks.
Jhenmhor
2019-07-16 03:42:23 +0000 UTCCould you use a font sans serif, please, my eyes are bleeding.
Jhenmhor
2019-07-16 03:34:59 +0000 UTCIt’s also deceptive as he’s only doing damage to one person. It’s an AOE and the more enemies, the more efficient the auras become
Robert Shaw
2019-07-16 00:56:38 +0000 UTCThanks!
SenescentSoul
2019-07-15 10:07:59 +0000 UTCI don't think Val has realized just how short time Rain has had to level. Val probably trained since he was a kid to max his skills and make the absolute most out of them. Meanwhile, Rain moved up from level zero, what, half a month ago? So when he sees Rain develop over the next few weeks, I think he'll be floored...
Elaborate
2019-07-15 00:41:37 +0000 UTCHm, I wonder whether there are cross-synergies between any two attributes. If there are synergy skills to make clarity give bigger HP and SP pools, Rain pretty much *has* to take them, so he's not such a glass cannon...
Elaborate
2019-07-15 00:30:50 +0000 UTCYou never knew with adventurers. <- know
Elaborate
2019-07-15 00:10:48 +0000 UTCI've been saying this to myself for a while now. Sit down, freeze some shit man!
Alston Sleet
2019-07-14 23:23:52 +0000 UTCThe multiple points of view are done really well. No head hoping, the narrative voice comes through cleanly for each character. If you plan to do multiple PoV's, this is how to do it... But you are right, it's discordant compared to the earlier narrative, just as the singular Jamus PoV chapter is a shift. This as it is, is not a problem. It's done well, the shifts in PoV provide new information to the reader about each of the characters. It's the best of what it is doing. The danger here is the narrative equivalent of 'talking head syndrome'. Talking head syndrome is when you have characters using dialogue but what is going on around them disappears and it feels like you end up with disembodiment heads just talking to each other in a void. If done wrong, this could be the narrative equivalent, just characters going through actions, disconnected from each other without rhyme or reason. This, is *not* that, but it could be a concern. See 'The Arcane Emperor' early chapters vs later chapters. The later chapters have so many PoV shifts that it's actually difficult for a narrative to form, early chapters are singular and focused. As long as he avoids this pitfall, then an occasional chapter like this or the early 'non-MC' chapter is fine. It actually offers a chance to present things the MC will never think of or see.
Alston Sleet
2019-07-14 16:52:27 +0000 UTCRain really should be spending the time to fully upgrade his attack auras. They should be the easiest to upgrade since they have the highest mana cost, and they could save his life.
Joseph
2019-07-14 15:48:53 +0000 UTCHe's a typical main character, right? "OP mandatory boss fight failed, but the rescue npc mentioned a dungeon. Let's gather a party and get going.” He's even talking about killing the evil emperor, and got the knowledge of a rare class with super difficult prerequisites to get it done! He's awesome in a awful way :)
Chymor
2019-07-14 12:38:30 +0000 UTCVal is a total ass. Where is the gratitude?
Andrew Meyers
2019-07-14 12:32:56 +0000 UTCPersonally I think this chapter is all over the place, too many point of view changes, too many topics. I’m not a writer so take this with a grain of salt but I really suggest reducing pov changes, if not entire povs. For example extend the sparing parts and move Tallheart point of views to it’s own chapter.
Chymor
2019-07-14 12:15:14 +0000 UTCI have no idea why Rain let himself get shot, but ok...
Håvard
2019-07-14 11:44:42 +0000 UTC"I don't deal much damage" // *Jeez he's really weak* I mean...he's kinda been telling ya exactly that mate. @_@ Just you wait until he can have multiple auras active, and/or when he gets Winter Well
Keifru
2019-07-14 11:32:55 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter. :-)
Halldor Jonsson
2019-07-14 11:32:35 +0000 UTC
