Poll regarding the latest chapter and its writing structure.
Added 2021-01-02 17:43:03 +0000 UTCIt would appear that most of you prefer the first-person perspective and as such I will be going back to that. However, I noticed that the different way of writing dialogue wasn't mentioned, or at least not criticized.
So I wanted to use this poll to see if you preferred this way of writing dialogue:
"I have no intentions of affiliating with you damned zealots!" - Me
Or this:
"I personally don't mind it, " I said attempting to defuse the heated situation. "But I am rather worried if anything untoward is going to happen to us as we move through the valley..."
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P.S. the context and content of the two examples aren't to be factored in, only the way of setting up the dialogue. :D
Comments
Yes, very interesting. I've read some of their work before, and the style of writing and dialogue definitely seems to lean into that. The only problem I find with that style is that it (for me) seems very messy and convoluted. I fear that if I start writing like that I will lose track of things and make a mess. For now, I will try various ways, and come up with something that suits everybody's preferences! :D
Konge
2021-01-04 14:14:27 +0000 UTCGreydra, the author of "A Reincarnated Demon's Life of Wonder" uses this type of style, though he has his characters do a lot of thinking, even in the middle of high activity moments, whether that be fighting or conversations, that it borders on monologues.... that being said, his style would be a good point of reference if you want to get more examples for my suggestion.... actually, I would say it is both at the same time.... for example, 'Hm? Those adventurers are coming over here? What do they want?' .......That would be where the heavy thinking comes in, I'd say
Jaren
2021-01-03 02:16:06 +0000 UTCLet's see, in regards to the balance I mentioned in my reply to Pincho69..... Perhaps, something like.... (Zealot) "You would be contributing to the greater good if you aide us" ....linebreak.... These damned lunatics!..... linebreak...... (Me) "I refuse to work with you damned zealots!" Damned troublemakers, now, how will they respond, I wonder?...... something like that perhaps? Instead of a monologue, it's his thoughts, before- brings readers into his heart, and after- brings us into his mind..... something along these lines perhaps?
Jaren
2021-01-03 02:10:30 +0000 UTCYou make a good point, though you should keep in mind that people don't monologue everything they say or do, so though the second way gives more insight into the character's mindset, which is awesome, you also don't really get to put yourself into their shoes..... That being said, you are right in that the first way leaves too much to the imagination, making it difficult in another sense to put yourself in their shoes.... so a balance between the two would be ideal, hmm, I'll try to think of something in my own post
Jaren
2021-01-03 02:01:38 +0000 UTCThe second one makes your writing adult. The other less than amateur
Pincho69
2021-01-02 23:19:37 +0000 UTC
