My Son's Girlfriend (Chapter 7)
Added 2025-03-18 04:23:32 +0000 UTCChapter 7: https://imgchest.com/p/o24a3ww6eyl
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This chapter will likely generate a lot of debateπ
The concerns I have (aside from telling me itβs too rushed) are two:
I feel like I could have written more between the videos, but I didnβt want to overdo the situation (especially since she was drunk).
I hope readers wonβt be confused by the fatherβs behavior (since he didnβt have a "friend" to reveal his true intentions to, it wasnβt immediately obvious that he was a master manipulator pulling the strings behind the scenes).
(By the way, weβre still far from the end of this story)
Comments
Perhaps the father can send her a secret present. A cock-mold of his dick, and pretend it is a gift from his son. So she uses it.. only to realize later, she has been getting off with her father-in-law this entire time?
BimboBlonde
2025-03-21 03:01:19 +0000 UTCI agree with your comments here, later on would be better as the tension and frustration builds
Falcon
2025-03-19 23:24:29 +0000 UTCThanks for the feedback! Just curious, what do you mean by "unnecessary chat"? I think the conversations with the mom were actually important to build up Alina's frustration and lead to this chapter. I donβt plan to add more of those chats though, since theyβve already served their purpose for Chapter 7. As for the dick pic, I like it, but Iβm a bit unsure about how to make it realistic without giving Alina the chance to turn the tables and potentially blackmail Michael haha. How could Michael pull it off without risking too much? Maybe the dick pic idea is works better for later in the story, when the frustration builds up even more?
HBO AMC
2025-03-19 10:38:45 +0000 UTCThatβs a really good story man, keep going! But I think It would be better if you reduce other unnecessary chat. And maybe Michael want to send her a dick pic and seduce her with that, I think It can be good for the story
Samet Can Kayali
2025-03-19 07:31:27 +0000 UTCAgreed with others. My only feedback is to make the chapters a little longer.
Michael
2025-03-18 18:25:57 +0000 UTCVery excited for this story
Uldamen .
2025-03-18 16:21:25 +0000 UTCI think itβs implied from his actions anyway - I donβt think you need a nefarious side plot text chain to understand what his plan is. Iβve loved how this one is progressing so far, the pace is great.
Falcon
2025-03-18 15:08:27 +0000 UTCTotally agree
Falcon
2025-03-18 07:25:43 +0000 UTCI think this progress is fine if she pulls back a bit since she wonβt be drunk
Omega6464
2025-03-18 04:38:46 +0000 UTC
