Zenith of Sorcery, Chapter 18 - Incursion
Added 2024-12-23 02:53:50 +0000 UTCHello everyone. The new chapter is here! The links:
https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/71045/zenith-of-sorcery/chapter/1970043/18-incursion
https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3368346/19/Zenith-of-Sorcery
(Thanks to the interlude I posted, the numbering on fictionpress is a bit off, but I will just have to deal with it.)
Also, I'd like to wish you all a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Years! I hope you all enjoy the chapter and the holiday season too. And if you don't celebrate these that's okay, too - just enjoy yourself in general and be happy, I guess.
Comments
Early call but we got a regressor
Faa Diallo
2024-12-24 03:53:20 +0000 UTCLol that was a funny ref to Avatar
Faa Diallo
2024-12-24 03:48:08 +0000 UTCI would find it useful to get a short reminder, and in general seeing more of their personalities always helps
Lars Huluk
2024-12-23 22:10:38 +0000 UTCI feel that perhaps it would be better if the author would maybe not do that? if he is gonna start to write details on all 10 + students while world building he will never be able to progress the story
Tim Deral
2024-12-23 22:03:41 +0000 UTCYeah I was wondering whether her guardian would notice actually
Tim Deral
2024-12-23 22:02:07 +0000 UTCMake them introduce themselves to celer sounds natural to me. I'm sure some readers will appreciate it :) It could be amusing watching celer blurting things students want to keep secret (most obviously Iris - "are you sure you're from this planet?")
Andrew Browne
2024-12-23 21:46:08 +0000 UTCWonderful chapter, I throughly enjoyed myself. Also that one line about One student thinking that he is wearing more made me laugh out loud, Like fine vintage !
Tim Deral
2024-12-23 21:12:07 +0000 UTCI didn't note it in this chapter, but yes, Iris already has a soul seed. :) As it has been a week since she joined.
Domagoj Kurmaic
2024-12-23 10:09:41 +0000 UTCYeah, the first day for them has long passed, but I'm sure I could find an excuse if I wanted to. Maybe he wants to introduce all of them to Celer, or makes a big deal out of checking on each of them after some time has passed. My main worry was whether the readers would even find it useful. It's obviously not entirely necessary from a plot perspective to do this scene.
Domagoj Kurmaic
2024-12-23 10:08:53 +0000 UTCThanks for the chapter! This one was good too. We got to meet and get first impressions of the new students along with seeing the reactions of existing students. We also learned a bit more about Chaos storms. And predictably that troll who made a mess for him at the academy was waiting for them when they got back. Fortunately the girl herself stepped in after seeing Shamshir acting like such an ass and was able to make a much better impression on him. Iris might have been able to tell that he'd appreciate doing away with the bullshit and getting some sincerity. Or maybe she was just completely done with her uncle herself. Funny as it is to watch, he's the kind of guy you'd hate to deal with in real life. So looks like she's the most likely to bring trouble out of all his students. So naturally he had to tempt fate with that thought that there was no way someone from the eastern lands would show up to call him out on his bullshit, right? Who wants to bet that he made a lot bigger impression on the locals during his travels than he himself bothered to take notice of? Enough that some people from those places will come looking for him sooner or later? Easy bet right?
DiabolicalGenius
2024-12-23 08:45:02 +0000 UTCI wonder if Marcus will soulseed Iris, or if that may be considered a provocation.
Andrew Browne
2024-12-23 06:08:24 +0000 UTCImo it would be fine to just give a list with notes, outside the story. It would also be fine to do it in a way that feels natural, like.. "Marcus looked over his students, assembled in front of him, genuinely pondering how to best instruct each individual. X was ...description.... Marcus would have to make sure X improved on ..weakness... Then there was Y, who...". Marcus thinking all these things internally feels natural. It would also make sense for Marcus to do it as a team building exercise, if they're not getting along. I guess it is a common first day of school thing irl - but the first day for most of them has passed. Imo it is most useful to give name and some quick reminders each time they appear (can do both approaches). It is usually some time between reading chapters and I have already (once) thought "wait, was this the kid who ...". Being able to refer to a chapter is nice, but having reminders locally is handy.
Andrew Browne
2024-12-23 05:42:14 +0000 UTC> Also, I have a question for you: how do you feel about a section where every one of Marcus's students introduces themselves and Marcus gives some brief observations about them. Now that his students have all been assembled (spoiler, I guess) I was thinking of giving a bit of a reminder/description of them in one place, but I'm worried that it's it will be redundant/superfluous. What do you all think?
Andrew Browne
2024-12-23 05:41:18 +0000 UTCThank you for this Christmas and New Year's Present!
Green0Photon
2024-12-23 03:26:09 +0000 UTCThank you!
Andrew
2024-12-23 03:25:38 +0000 UTC
